tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33282234.post386904869348457060..comments2022-09-26T08:37:45.849+01:00Comments on be the serpent: Odd Socks (written for a writing challenge-not great but still a poem i guess)be the serpenthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00741238317853342892noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33282234.post-45136866306324092932009-09-16T10:39:13.199+01:002009-09-16T10:39:13.199+01:00Your work is always very evocative and I enjoyed t...Your work is always very evocative and I enjoyed the recurring fairytale aspect of this poem very much.<br /><br />But Beauty lives here with the Beast and that I cannot leave.<br />So I hang odd socks on the line, his and mine.<br />While the dog eats rocks<br /><br />This is a lovely stanza and the repetition of the rhyme rocks and socks in here is great. Whod have thought socks and rocks still had an original rhyme left in them? <br /><br />Great stuffpoetrytutorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13415138047604526343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33282234.post-64858207379302276082009-08-05T14:02:46.310+01:002009-08-05T14:02:46.310+01:00This is really different from your usual work but ...This is really different from your usual work but it's still ace.<br /><br />That poor pooch though he doesn't come off well here.<br /><br />Favourite line? "I pray for goblins everyday"<br /><br />Can't wait to see what you guys come up with for vampires.<br />xAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33282234.post-62568077799414153022009-08-05T13:24:52.424+01:002009-08-05T13:24:52.424+01:00Agreed, twas a tough one this but I reckon you'...Agreed, twas a tough one this but I reckon you've pulled it off with this slice of bestial hatred lol.<br /><br />Nah tis kind of cute actually the love/hate push/pull thing running through.<br /><br />Love the whole chewin rocks placed against the devouring of socks.<br /><br /> <br />I genuinely love this section:<br /> <br /><br />Now I hang odd socks on the line, his and mine.<br /><br />While the dog eats rocks.<br /><br />I call him in, he runs away. I wish for goblins every day.<br /><br />It’s not that I’m a devil. I don’t despise the dog. <br /><br />He’s lovely, when he sleeps.<br /><br />His whimpering dreams and running legs are sweet and<br /><br />when he rests his wide black head against my foot,<br /><br />I cannot help but like him, stroke him, rub his orange belly hair.<br /><br /> <br /> - altho perhaps we should be stopped - what are the chances that when given a challenge involving odd socks we'd both end up throwin in oblique Bowie references? (I wish for goblins everyday lol). Awww they should so use this as the sequel to Labyrinth - you searching for Jake after making the goblins come get him hahaha.<br /><br />Is it too soon to whisper Oscar? x<br /><br />Vampires next you say?steven.nash82https://www.blogger.com/profile/12170451589468557651noreply@blogger.com